Iran-+Tess&Hannah

Iran is bordered by water on the North and the South sides, and on the West and the East it is landlocked. To the West there is Iraq and Turkey, and to the East it's bordered by Afghanistan and Pakistan. 65.8 __million__ people in habit Iran's 636, 296 square miles. Overall Iran is a very unique country. (HC) Language is the vocal sounds or words common to a particular nation or group of people. The official language of Iran is Persain. Other languages spoken in this country are Turkish, Kurdish, Turkic, and Arabic. Iran is unique in that it is the only country that speaks Turkic. I think that Iran speaks Turkish because Turkey borders Iran to the Northwest, and they might have shared language through trading, That also confused me because why have Turkish __and__ Turkic. (HC) Literacy is the ability to read and write effectively. The literacy rates in Iran are 82% for men and 66% for women. In the Middle East all of the countries except Yemen have a larger percent than Iran for men. Egypt, Iraq, and Yemen have a smaller percentage of literate women. In Iran it is clear that the men are more literate than women, that leads me to think that it is probably not likely for women to be able to get and education. (HC) Religion is a system of beliefs and worships, it often involves a philosophy or code of ethics. In Iran the primary religion is Islam. Iran is smilar to all the countries in the middle East because they all practice al least one kind of Islam. Although Iran is mostly similar to Yemen and Iraq because Those countries are both __mostly__ Islam. I think that this religion could have been shared through these countries by trading also, because Iraq borders Iran to the West and Yemen is south of both. (HC) Ethnicty is a grouping based on a common cutral heritage, distinguished by customs, language nationality, or race. Iran is persain. It's most echnically diverse. It is probably the most diverse because it's the only country that has a really big culture. That's probably why it's the most diverse. (TO)



Iran's Supreme Leader Ayatollah Khamenei Meets With Iran's Intelligence Minister In Tehran." //UPI Photo Collection//. United Press International, 2010. //Gale Student Resources In Context//. Web. 27 Mar. 2012.

__Life__ expectancy is the average number of years members of population are expected to live. Irans population of people are 71 years old. Out of nine countries Iran is one of the lower life expectancy. It's on of the lower ones because there's about a nine-teen year difference between the higher and lower life expectancy.(TO) "Morning Service At Tehran Synagouge In Iran." //UPI Photo Collection//. United Press International, 2010. //Gale Student Resources In Context//. Web. 27 Mar. 2012.

Urbanization is a Industrialized area (cities) in a country (%). Iran is Urbanized 95 percent, Iran is Urbanized a good amount but Iran is not the only one thats Urbanized 95 percent. Kwait is also Urbannized 95 percent. But Iran and Kuwait are one the biggest country to Urbanize. So you can say that Iran is very Urbanized. (TO)

Iranians In Tehran Protest U.S. Pastor's Plan To Burn Korans." //UPI Photo Collection//. United Press International, 2010. //Gale Student Resources In Context//. Web. 27 Mar. 2012. This picture is showing how much Iran is Urbanized. So all of the people represent Urbanize

Iran more is different from the other countries. It's one of the most Urbanized country. The mens literacy in Iran is 82%. Which is the 7th lowest amount of literacy. Iran's approximate life extpectancy is 71 years. Iran is one of the lower life expectancy. The offical language in Iran is Persain. Iran is the only country that's main language is Persain.So Iran is unigue in many different ways(TO)

I noticed that you say that Iran is the most diverse, I would like to know why it is the most diverse. Also, what is it the most diverse of. I would challenge the writer to elaborate more on how Iran stands out from the other countries, and would combind the the third sentence and the fourth sentence of the your diversity paragraph. I was confused by the way the second and third sentensis were worded in the urbanization paragraph, what did you mean by "but Iran is not the only one thats Urbanized 95 percent" did you mean: Iran is not the only countriy that is 95% urbanized? I would suggest that you add in some other countries life expectences to compare to yours. You found a great picture to represent life expectancy, it showed an older man and your piece talked about how long people live. The pictures for urbanization and for ethnicity kind of confused me, i did not see how they were related to your writing. Overall, i think that you had some great facts, and were pretty organized! good work! (Haley M.)

I noticed that you have alot of good details. I also saw that you discribed all of your words. Some questions that i have are what do you think you could make more interesting about Iran. I would suggest that you explain the pictures more. I also think that the writer could make their paragraphs have more detail. The author did a good job withspelling, and spacin. The color of your paragraphs makes you want to read it more. I think the picture that is most effective would be the litericy because it makes you think of writing when you look at it and i think that is what you were trying to do so you did a good job :)I think that all you really need to work on would be to put in two pictures for the first two paragraphs. But other than that you did a really good job! (Lily T.)

It is kind of small and the commments are in the middle of paragraphs do I cant really read it .(kr)

After recieving peer feedback on my rough draft and wiki, I made the following three changes:

1) I added a map to my 1st paragraph because my feedback said that I needed it and it does make it much more interesting.

2)I added more interesting language because it was a bit boring to read, so instead of just saying Iran is bordered by land, I said that it was landlocked.

3) Also to make my wiki more enjoyable to read I Added a sentence to my language paragraph saying that I did not understand why there was Turkish and Turkic because I was wondering that and it made the paragraph a little more opinionated.

From the feedback process I learned that sometimes you think that your wiki is perfect but then someone else reads it and they find little flaws that will make the writing that much more interesting or boost the grade just that much. Overall thoough, I thought it was a very good process and really helped me improve my work. Hannah C.

After receiving peer feedback in my rough draft and wiki, I made she following three changes:

1). I added the word more person said Iran isdifferent then the 7 countries. Know it's Iran is more different than the 7 countries.

2). I describe the picture about Urbanized more by saying that the people there represent Urbanize.

3). I made the wording in the Life Expectancy more clearer for people to read.

From this feedback process I learned that I can make my writing better. Also that if you just quickly write or type up the paragraph it want be good. The feedback can always be really, really helpful.